In this concluding installment, I’m going to play the role of the thought police.<\/p>\n
It is inevitable that your H\/H think about each other.\u00a0 And they should.\u00a0 But remember, do not duplicate real life here and write long scenes where nothing goes on except somebody reliving events that had already taken place.\u00a0 We know what happened already. Move on to the next set of events.<\/p>\n
But what about the non-POV character, you ask?\u00a0 We need to know what the non-POV character\u2019s reaction was to the kiss\/screw\/crisis.<\/p>\n
It\u2019s okay.\u00a0 Move on with the story, have the hero and the heroine do what they need to do, and then to have them think what happened or think of each other only when triggered.<\/p>\n
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This does two things.\u00a0 One, it improves the pacing of your story, always moving it forward.\u00a0 And remember, pacing matters to chemistry.<\/p>\n
Two, it actually heightens the tension.<\/p>\n
Remember, we readers of romance read a romance for the relationship.\u00a0 We are already, a priori, interested in what the hero and the heroine think of each other.\u00a0 By getting on with the story, by withholding revealing what they think of a kiss, a screw, or each other, you are building that tension.<\/p>\n
And when the reveal comes, it is more powerful for having been delayed.\u00a0 And it is even more powerful for having been triggered.\u00a0 By this I mean, because your hero and heroine are in conflict, they, or at least one of them, do not want this relationship to go in the direction it is inexorably headed.\u00a0 They do not want to think about the kiss or the screw or the whatever that happened between them.\u00a0 They just want to get on with their lives.<\/p>\n
And by limiting the amount of verbiage you spend on them thinking about each other, by conveying the fact that they only think of each other when they must, and yet they are still thinking about each other all too much for their comfort, you are heightening the chemistry, you are doing the conflict a service, and you do not waste any forward momentum on just mere thoughts.<\/p>\n
[Of course your characters can and should reflect on dramatic events.\u00a0 The point is to do so judiciously.\u00a0 It is rare that a book is criticized for the H\/H never thinking of each other; but too often romances suffer because there is too much thinking going on.]<\/p>\n
The example is from Laura Kinsale’s The Shadow and the Star<\/em>.\u00a0 We are almost halfway into the book. \u00a0 There had been flashback scenes from his childhood and adolescence before, but this is the first time we get adult Samuel’s POV, the first time we know what he thinks of Leda–or how he tries not to think of her.<\/p>\n It would not have been so difficult, except for the distraction, the fate that had taken all the floating, chaotic energy of shikijo and fused it on her.\u00a0 Samuel thought of her with her white shift pulled over her bare legs, drinking tea and arching her feet in a delicate motion like a dancer; he thought of her head bowed, all that shining hair, her hand poised over her notebook and the soft skin of her nape above the demure turned-down collar.\u00a0 He could not keep his center; he kept falling from the way, losing zanshin, the vigilant unattached mind, and with it years of exercise and discipline.<\/em><\/span><\/p>\n To combat it, he spent long night hours sitting silently, trying not to want, attempting to shed all conscious desire, and still she crept into his mind like a slow heat.\u00a0 He sat peacefully, facing a wall, thinking of nothing, and out of nothing the essence of her formed, the image of her brushing out her hair over naked shoulders, the curve of her back, the white roundness of her hips as she bent to step into her skirts.<\/em><\/span><\/p>\n Perfect.<\/span><\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":" In this concluding installment, I’m going to play the role of the thought police. It is inevitable that your H\/H think about each other.\u00a0 And they should.\u00a0 But remember, do not duplicate real life here and write long scenes where nothing goes on except somebody reliving events that had already taken place.\u00a0 We know what … Read more<\/a><\/p>\n","protected":false},"author":2,"featured_media":0,"comment_status":"closed","ping_status":"open","sticky":false,"template":"","format":"standard","meta":[],"categories":[31],"tags":[54],"_links":{"self":[{"href":"https:\/\/www.sherrythomas.com\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/631"}],"collection":[{"href":"https:\/\/www.sherrythomas.com\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts"}],"about":[{"href":"https:\/\/www.sherrythomas.com\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/types\/post"}],"author":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/www.sherrythomas.com\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/users\/2"}],"replies":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/www.sherrythomas.com\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/comments?post=631"}],"version-history":[{"count":7,"href":"https:\/\/www.sherrythomas.com\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/631\/revisions"}],"predecessor-version":[{"id":635,"href":"https:\/\/www.sherrythomas.com\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/631\/revisions\/635"}],"wp:attachment":[{"href":"https:\/\/www.sherrythomas.com\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/media?parent=631"}],"wp:term":[{"taxonomy":"category","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/www.sherrythomas.com\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/categories?post=631"},{"taxonomy":"post_tag","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/www.sherrythomas.com\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/tags?post=631"}],"curies":[{"name":"wp","href":"https:\/\/api.w.org\/{rel}","templated":true}]}}